I agree that the proper name would turn up during research; though I think it would be amusing if Mika referred to Revar by that term, and she's like, "'Derysi?' What the hell is that?" :)
I've actually finished the first chapter draft now, and an exchange that isn't too far off from that happens.
The Derysi are supposed to be pretty rare; Revar and Jemara only knew of one another in the city "Gift" takes place in. I envision that Raneadhros has a moderate large population, even though that's not mentioned in either story, but I also suspect they could all be in one or two neighborhood blocks. In many parts of Ranea, it'd be pretty easy to go through your whole life without seeing one. (And of course, the whole "we have to take blood from living, sapient prey" thing does play into the fear in a way that doesn't have a direct parallel to real life.)
One thing that's a bit interesting -- well, maybe -- as I went back over the story is observing that while class was always present in "Gift," there was an obvious point that I missed. The existing version mostly treats Dahlu and Mika as being from the same social/economic milieu, but they're not. Consciously or not, Dahlu is trying to lift Mika up. (Dahlu was kind of cardboard through most of "Gift," which has always bothered me; the reader shouldn't really be left wondering just what Mika saw in her in the first place.)
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Date: 2008-02-21 07:42 (UTC)I've actually finished the first chapter draft now, and an exchange that isn't too far off from that happens.
The Derysi are supposed to be pretty rare; Revar and Jemara only knew of one another in the city "Gift" takes place in. I envision that Raneadhros has a moderate large population, even though that's not mentioned in either story, but I also suspect they could all be in one or two neighborhood blocks. In many parts of Ranea, it'd be pretty easy to go through your whole life without seeing one. (And of course, the whole "we have to take blood from living, sapient prey" thing does play into the fear in a way that doesn't have a direct parallel to real life.)
One thing that's a bit interesting -- well, maybe -- as I went back over the story is observing that while class was always present in "Gift," there was an obvious point that I missed. The existing version mostly treats Dahlu and Mika as being from the same social/economic milieu, but they're not. Consciously or not, Dahlu is trying to lift Mika up. (Dahlu was kind of cardboard through most of "Gift," which has always bothered me; the reader shouldn't really be left wondering just what Mika saw in her in the first place.)