Brief observation

[chipotle]

So I'm tweaking the horror story and thinking I've got to make this suck more. And it occurred to me that this is about the only genre where that's a positive thing.

...Of course, I mean "make this suck more for the characters," but it's still sort of perversely amusing to be looking critically at the text and thinking how do I maximize the gut punch effect without increasing the word count?

(N.B.: thanks to shaterri the story's tentative title is "Carrier.")

Comments

[rikoshi.livejournal.com]

So I'm tweaking the horror story and thinking I've got to make this suck more.

And you didn't ask a fox?

Nah, seriously, I hope that the feedback you got on Monday night was helpful. For what it's worth, I think you can definitely do what needs to be done with it.

[chipotle.livejournal.com]

It was definitely useful feedback, yes.

I was working at Barefoot Coffee yesterday for a few hours after lunch, and noticed your car there, although not you. That was vaguely mysterious!

[rikoshi.livejournal.com]

Yeah, the person I carpool to work with (3catsjackson) and I are both Barefoot addicts, and since it's located roughly halfway between where we both live, we usually just meet up there in the mornings, and then we both take one car into the city.

But yes, you're not the first person to fall victim to the Barefoot Rikoshi Fakeout.